ext_262220 ([identity profile] astralavator.insanejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] crankyoldman 2008-06-03 07:09 pm (UTC)

I’ve missed your stories and old ladies are awesome even if they’re not running around solving mysterious.

This is certainly a good ensnaring first chapter. While I couldn’t help thinking Quistis could have been graying early, I did like the aged feel of the chapter. The regret was certain a cobweb over everything else. I also like how you’ve worked in the some of the main groups reactions to fighting your foster mom even if she was for only a bit you would think there would be some type of reaction.

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